Originally posted by MerryK
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I love that the thread is active...but for people like me whose jobs are internet-lacking, it's a love/hate relationship waiting until after work to read all 3 pages.
So, I was thinking about that scene in Unending today. And well, I'm a dialogue Nazi, and can't think of a single book or movie that didn't have at least one line of dialogue that I would rewrite. The first time I saw Daniel's rant to Vala, I was so caught up with the emotion and everything felt just right for the situation. However, since then, I've migrated a little towards the "wow, that's harsh" opinion, though definitely not all the way.
So my challenge to the Fruitcakes is: how would you have written that scene? Given the scenario, what would you have had Daniel say and how would he have said it? I have a good idea of how I'd rewrite it, but I'm curious to see other's ideas before submitting my own.
So, I was thinking about that scene in Unending today. And well, I'm a dialogue Nazi, and can't think of a single book or movie that didn't have at least one line of dialogue that I would rewrite. The first time I saw Daniel's rant to Vala, I was so caught up with the emotion and everything felt just right for the situation. However, since then, I've migrated a little towards the "wow, that's harsh" opinion, though definitely not all the way.
So my challenge to the Fruitcakes is: how would you have written that scene? Given the scenario, what would you have had Daniel say and how would he have said it? I have a good idea of how I'd rewrite it, but I'm curious to see other's ideas before submitting my own.
Vala: 'Try saying that without your teeth, scumbag!" Crunch.
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