First FanFic and non-IWasForcedToDoItForEnglish story so bear with me please. May change without warning.
Comments and Criticism?
Note: may appear to need more fleshing out but bear in mind this is mostly fighting.
Flight of the Phoenix
Whilst road-testing a new prototype Alternate Reality Drive something goes terribly wrong.
Chanting can be heard whilst the screen fades in. As the picture emerges SG-1 and O'Neill can be seen standing idly next to a contingent of Tok'ra. Eventually the chanting stops and a needle slowly moves across the screen. The camera pans and Ba'al can be seen strapped into a symboite removal machine. As the needle approaches Ba'al confesses that he is the last of the clones but the original Ba'al is still at large. He goes on to gloat about how he had a backup plan in case this would ever happen. Just then Tok'ra begin to disappear. SG-1 run out of the temple and start towards the gate, behind entire buildings start to disappear. Daniel frantically tries to dial the gate but it's hopeless as the DHD disappears right before him.
Opening Scene
SG-1 (consisting of Cameron Mitchell, Samantha Carter and Daniel Jackson) are sat in the briefing room talking amongst themselves. General Landry walks in and briefs the team, they will be in charge of the Phoenix as it makes its maiden flight through realities. A bright blue flash envelopes the team and they remerge on the bridge of the Phoenix. The ship powers up its engines and moves a little way out into space before it starts pulsing green. Then it flashes and disappears. In another reality the crew of the Phoenix check some readouts when the entire ship shakes. Looking out the window an Ori ship can be seen preparing to fire again. Jumping into action the Phoenix begins evasive manoeuvres, soaring above the Ori ship it activates its plasma arrays and pummel the shields. The Ori shields flicker and give up and a beam of blue plasma rips into the power core causing the ship to explode violently. Unfortunately three more Ori ships emerge from hyperspace and fire upon the Phoenix. Just before the third shot hits the ship pulses as the AR Drive activates.
On Earth the president is rushing through the Pentagon. Reaching the briefing room he is informed that as of ten minutes ago several alien ships appeared above the planet, since then they have begun taking up positions around the planet. The camera pulls back to one of the Ha'taks. On the Pel'tak Ba'al is addressing the other System Lords. They walk out and a slave brings up a phone. Picking it up, Ba'al rings the President and makes an offer. There is a slicing sound and the camera pulls out a bit to reveal a sword sticking out of his chest. He slowly hangs up as Q'Tesh pulls the sword further up through his body. Finishing it, she yanks the sword up out of him. Turning she just catches sight of Teal'c turning a corner. Leaving his fate to later, she calls a servant and tells him to inform the others that bombardment is about to begin.
On the ground, sensors pick up the charging of weapons, then another anomaly is being detected. In an attempt to get the first strike the President orders a world wide nuclear strike against the enemy. Several missiles rise off the surface and head towards space. A few impact against shields but then they flicker and collapse. Soon several ships are destroyed but more take their place. However, the strike did not go unnoticed, the Phoenix which had recently emerged is alerted to the Goa'uld threat and once again lumbers into action. It flies towards the nearest Ha'tak launching its F-302s and two Puddle Jumpers as it goes. It charges its plasma emplacements and then fires, after three shots the Ha'tak is destroyed. Encouraged, the crew head towards the next ship and begin to once again charge weapons.
In the streets people are panicking, yellow plasma is raining down ripping through buildings and pavement alike. An Al'kesh flies over bombing buildings and taking out tanks with a Raptor close behind it. Several Death Gliders and another Al'kesh prepare to make a run at the Pentagon when they are taken out by a squad of F-302s. A Ha'tak that had broken away from the bombardment begins to target them when a Puddle Jumper decloaks and fires a few drones. The drones steer around incoming plasma bolts and enemy ships, drive straight through the Ha'tak's shield and hull before detonating with a brilliant flash.
In orbit several hyperspace windows can be seen opening as they fleet retreats. A lone ship is picked of before it can enter hyperspace but apart from that the fighting has stopped. Looking down, smoke can be seen rising from various nations of the Earth and Al'kesh and Death Gliders soar through the air with Tau'ri planes in hot pursuit. The screen changes to the AR room were the AR Drive sparks and then explodes. The screen fades out, leaving the words "To Be Continued".
Comments and Criticism?
Note: may appear to need more fleshing out but bear in mind this is mostly fighting.
Flight of the Phoenix
Whilst road-testing a new prototype Alternate Reality Drive something goes terribly wrong.
Spoiler:
Chanting can be heard whilst the screen fades in. As the picture emerges SG-1 and O'Neill can be seen standing idly next to a contingent of Tok'ra. Eventually the chanting stops and a needle slowly moves across the screen. The camera pans and Ba'al can be seen strapped into a symboite removal machine. As the needle approaches Ba'al confesses that he is the last of the clones but the original Ba'al is still at large. He goes on to gloat about how he had a backup plan in case this would ever happen. Just then Tok'ra begin to disappear. SG-1 run out of the temple and start towards the gate, behind entire buildings start to disappear. Daniel frantically tries to dial the gate but it's hopeless as the DHD disappears right before him.
Opening Scene
SG-1 (consisting of Cameron Mitchell, Samantha Carter and Daniel Jackson) are sat in the briefing room talking amongst themselves. General Landry walks in and briefs the team, they will be in charge of the Phoenix as it makes its maiden flight through realities. A bright blue flash envelopes the team and they remerge on the bridge of the Phoenix. The ship powers up its engines and moves a little way out into space before it starts pulsing green. Then it flashes and disappears. In another reality the crew of the Phoenix check some readouts when the entire ship shakes. Looking out the window an Ori ship can be seen preparing to fire again. Jumping into action the Phoenix begins evasive manoeuvres, soaring above the Ori ship it activates its plasma arrays and pummel the shields. The Ori shields flicker and give up and a beam of blue plasma rips into the power core causing the ship to explode violently. Unfortunately three more Ori ships emerge from hyperspace and fire upon the Phoenix. Just before the third shot hits the ship pulses as the AR Drive activates.
On Earth the president is rushing through the Pentagon. Reaching the briefing room he is informed that as of ten minutes ago several alien ships appeared above the planet, since then they have begun taking up positions around the planet. The camera pulls back to one of the Ha'taks. On the Pel'tak Ba'al is addressing the other System Lords. They walk out and a slave brings up a phone. Picking it up, Ba'al rings the President and makes an offer. There is a slicing sound and the camera pulls out a bit to reveal a sword sticking out of his chest. He slowly hangs up as Q'Tesh pulls the sword further up through his body. Finishing it, she yanks the sword up out of him. Turning she just catches sight of Teal'c turning a corner. Leaving his fate to later, she calls a servant and tells him to inform the others that bombardment is about to begin.
On the ground, sensors pick up the charging of weapons, then another anomaly is being detected. In an attempt to get the first strike the President orders a world wide nuclear strike against the enemy. Several missiles rise off the surface and head towards space. A few impact against shields but then they flicker and collapse. Soon several ships are destroyed but more take their place. However, the strike did not go unnoticed, the Phoenix which had recently emerged is alerted to the Goa'uld threat and once again lumbers into action. It flies towards the nearest Ha'tak launching its F-302s and two Puddle Jumpers as it goes. It charges its plasma emplacements and then fires, after three shots the Ha'tak is destroyed. Encouraged, the crew head towards the next ship and begin to once again charge weapons.
In the streets people are panicking, yellow plasma is raining down ripping through buildings and pavement alike. An Al'kesh flies over bombing buildings and taking out tanks with a Raptor close behind it. Several Death Gliders and another Al'kesh prepare to make a run at the Pentagon when they are taken out by a squad of F-302s. A Ha'tak that had broken away from the bombardment begins to target them when a Puddle Jumper decloaks and fires a few drones. The drones steer around incoming plasma bolts and enemy ships, drive straight through the Ha'tak's shield and hull before detonating with a brilliant flash.
In orbit several hyperspace windows can be seen opening as they fleet retreats. A lone ship is picked of before it can enter hyperspace but apart from that the fighting has stopped. Looking down, smoke can be seen rising from various nations of the Earth and Al'kesh and Death Gliders soar through the air with Tau'ri planes in hot pursuit. The screen changes to the AR room were the AR Drive sparks and then explodes. The screen fades out, leaving the words "To Be Continued".
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