Wraith Worshippers Anonymous - Introduction, Joining And Inactivity, Rules, OOC Chat

[Todd's Pet]

It is rather long. I hadn;t intended it to be anything like that long, but it just grew and grew...

Glad you're enjoying it though

[ciannwn]

It is rather long. I hadn;t intended it to be anything like that long, but it just grew and grew...

Glad you're enjoying it though

From what I've read so far it's not the kind of story that could be told in a couple of pages.

[Isolde]

Well done, TP, for getting back in the saddle. As 't'were... Very nice, and as romantic as I'd expect.

[ciannwn]

@ TP - have now finished it and Wow! The world through the eyes of a Wraith is brilliantly descriptive writing. I wasn't expecting the story to go the way it did - very imaginative and a beautiful ending.

Spoiler:

A couple of things I noticed.

The straight lines and hard angles of such modern human architecture looked harsh, aggressive and welcoming, as I experienced it through him and felt how much it offended his sense of beauty.

I think you made a typo there and it should be unwelcoming.

You've also got two chapter sevens - I noticed this when I did a browser find to resume reading from where I left off.

[Todd's Pet]

Well done, TP, for getting back in the saddle. As 't'were... Very nice, and as romantic as I'd expect.

Gosh, I didn't expect you to read it, hon - it was looooong (you know what Todd's like once he gets going! )and I know you're busy. Getting back intot he saddle with our beloved Commander is something I am rathe rpleased about

@ TP - have now finished it and Wow! The world through the eyes of a Wraith is brilliantly descriptive writing. I wasn't expecting the story to go the way it did - very imaginative and a beautiful ending.

Spoiler:

A couple of things I noticed.




I think you made a typo there and it should be unwelcoming.

You've also got two chapter sevens - I noticed this when I did a browser find to resume reading from where I left off.

Yep, there are more typos than that too... eg "Stick sucking on my fingers..." Should of course be "Still sucking on my fingers..."
And no, there's nothing sexual about that scene!!! )
It doesn't matter how many times you read it, you can never fully proofread your own work - simply because you've worked on it a lot, you just don't see them; your brian sees what it knows should be there rather than what really is there

Glad you both enjoyed it *hugs*

[Todd's Pet]

LOL! And that un-edited post shows just how many typos I managed to spot! So forgive the ones I missed!

[ciannwn]

It doesn't matter how many times you read it, you can never fully proofread your own work - simply because you've worked on it a lot, you just don't see them; your brian sees what it knows should be there rather than what really is there

I know exactly what you mean. Back in the days when my friend and I run fanzines my friend said something like this in an editorial - "We think we've caught all the typos but when the zine's been printed they leap out thumbing their noses at us."

PS: I like the idea of having a brian.

[Todd's Pet]

I know exactly what you mean. Back in the days when my friend and I run fanzines my friend said something like this in an editorial - "We think we've caught all the typos but when the zine's been printed they leap out thumbing their noses at us."

Yep, it's an occupational hazard of editors - and it's usually always in 20pt font too!!!

PS: I like the idea of having a brian.

It's not quite as good as loving in a hive instead of living in one!

[ciannwn]

It's not quite as good as loving in a hive instead of living in one!

Was that a Freudian slip?

[Todd's Pet]

Todd & Steve: And exactly what else would you do in a hive anyway?

[ciannwn]

Todd & Steve: And exactly what else would you do in a hive anyway?

Fred: There's skateboarding and water pistol combat.

[Todd's Pet]

Steve: *facepalm*

Todd: Have patience, Fred is barely out of younglinghood... he'll appreciate the delights of worshippers more when he's a little older

[rora'sPA]

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[Isolde]

Sold my house!

[ciannwn]

sold my house!

congratulations