Just read it, interesting. I'm guessing they're the ones who had the personal transporter Kiryk had.
I'm still not sure on this whole 'Starfighter League" but updates will prove to be a good distraction
I think you need to refocus a bit on where to add detail and where not to. Ford going back to his base and getting his men wasn't really all that important, i would have preferred more of the two of them getting to know each other like Ford said about becoming a LT. Definitely would have loved much much more on the SFL themselves.
I'd say add more detail to background and plot heavy elements rather than non-plot important details like going to find his men. The pacing for the last 2 chapters has been a bit of a drag so i'd recommend more emphasis on the plot heavy aspects such as what Ford did during those years in a montage style writing
Still quite cool
I'm still not sure on this whole 'Starfighter League" but updates will prove to be a good distraction
I think you need to refocus a bit on where to add detail and where not to. Ford going back to his base and getting his men wasn't really all that important, i would have preferred more of the two of them getting to know each other like Ford said about becoming a LT. Definitely would have loved much much more on the SFL themselves.
I'd say add more detail to background and plot heavy elements rather than non-plot important details like going to find his men. The pacing for the last 2 chapters has been a bit of a drag so i'd recommend more emphasis on the plot heavy aspects such as what Ford did during those years in a montage style writing
Still quite cool
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