Originally posted by Goose
View Post
Announcement
Collapse
No announcement yet.
Fanfic Pet Peeves
Collapse
X
-
Originally posted by Feast of the Muse View PostHere in the southern US, that would be a particular person you are talking about. "The Colonel" down here is none other than Colonel Sanders... of Kentucky Fried Chicken.Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by Goose View PostWithout quoting that massive text on the last page, all I have to say is that I guess that I've been proved wrong. But I still think that 'The Colonel' looks better.
I personally think it looks really dumb and inconsistent to have "the colonel" in the prose and then "Colonel" in someone's dialogue, or an attribution.
Further, I would argue that for Carter, who only calls Jack "sir" or "colonel" even the construction "the colonel" is, for her, essentially a name and it's functioning as a proper noun, even with the "the."
For my series, Carter was "the Colonel" to a trio of secondary characters - that was all they called her. It was her name, and it was always capitalized when writing from their POV. Further, when talking about her, all characters (who used the rank) called her "the Colonel" capitalized because again, they're using it as a name. So that's my position on that.
Comment
-
That's fine; just be aware that if you were writing for actual publication, your editor would change it. There are actual writing style rules that govern it, and it looks wrong to many of us when they aren't followed. I outlined why they work the way they do, and the reasons are logical. Titles aren't proper nouns when you put "the" in front of them; otherwise, we would captialize ALL nouns and our Writing would look like something out of the 18th century:
Jack walked down the Ramp from the Stargate, carrying his Backpack and Zat. General Hammond awaited him and the rest of his Team at the Bottom of the Ramp, wearing a Smile on his Face. "I gather you found Naquadah on the Planet?" he asked.
The Colonel grinned. "Oh, they have Naquadah, all right. They also have a big honkin' Library that I could barely pull Daniel away from. All kinds of Books and Scrolls, in about thirty different Languages. He'd still be there if the Natives hadn't informed him that he'd need to wait three Weeks for his Application for a Library Card to be approved.
The General grinned past the Colonel's Shoulder at the embarrassed Look on the Archaeologist's Face. "Well, Doctor Jackson, it seems to me that you'll have to wait a While before you can delve as deeply into the History of that Planet and its People as you would like."
The younger Man shrugged. "I guess so. But at least it gives me Something to look forward to."Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by sbz View PostFor my series, Carter was "the Colonel" to a trio of secondary characters - that was all they called her. It was her name, and it was always capitalized when writing from their POV. Further, when talking about her, all characters (who used the rank) called her "the Colonel" capitalized because again, they're using it as a name. So that's my position on that.
Comment
-
Originally posted by sbz View PostFor my series, Carter was "the Colonel" to a trio of secondary characters - that was all they called her. It was her name, and it was always capitalized when writing from their POV. Further, when talking about her, all characters (who used the rank) called her "the Colonel" capitalized because again, they're using it as a name. So that's my position on that.Originally posted by Feast of the Muse View PostI'm tempted to agree with sbz on this one, only because the article seems to be part of the name in that particular case. If they always call her the colonel then that whole phrase has become her name. We don't capitalize articles unless they begin a sentence or title, so of course you aren't capitalizing it even as part of the name. So her name would be, to them, the Colonel.
I go with what is standard in the books I read. Published novels in the mil fic or military SF genres don't capitalize the titles except in very specific circumstances, as I laid out in an earlier post. Therefore, I follow the same rule for the sake of consistency, since I assume most of the people reading fanfic also read commercial fiction in the same genre. It really is less jarring for the reader.
Incidentally, this is also the same rule that the United States Air Force itself follows in the writing of press releases and other material. Since the USAF is such a huge factor in Stargate and the titles in question here are primarily military ranks, it seems only appropriate to me to follow the same conventions followed by the actual USAF itself.Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by JackSnakeskinner View PostI have kind of a related question, as this goes not just for your story - why would some words be rendered in another language? Do they speak English the rest of the time? Otherwise it seems odd that some words would be in another language (Welsh, here).
I know - the same goes for the entire show (and many others shows) - why do some words get spoken in another language? Why do Jaffa only speak some words in Goa'uld (even among themselves)?
Technically, SF, you are also right in that I should not have capitalized firéad at all, but I also think a pet name of that type falls into the murkiness enough that I'm not going back to edit over it until and unless I de-fan fic the story and send it to a publisher (or edit and repost the whole thing, which I don't see happening as I have too many plot bunnies nipping at my ankles, knees, etc).sigpicSig by Bay, for my birthday. Find me on fanfiction.net, AO3, or fictionpress.com. If you are over 18, I invite you to read my blogs. On Blogger: Other Worlds, Other Loves On Wordpress: Other Worlds, Other Loves.Fennyman: "Who is that?" Henslowe: "Nobody. The author." (From Shakespeare in Love)
Comment
-
Originally posted by Whytewytch View PostTechnically, SF, you are also right in that I should not have capitalized firéad at all, but I also think a pet name of that type falls into the murkiness enough that I'm not going back to edit over it until and unless I de-fan fic the story and send it to a publisher (or edit and repost the whole thing, which I don't see happening as I have too many plot bunnies nipping at my ankles, knees, etc).Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by SF_and_Coffee View PostOh dear, do yours nip too? I just keep hoping mine are all up to date on their shots, as there are rather too many to keep track of myself.Spoiler:(hope you watch Sanctuary--if not, think Tribbles with teeth). They are some randy little critters at times, as well. Right now, I am trying to finish the third in a trilogy for the Robin Hood BBC fandom, complete a multi-chap romance in the SGA fandom and have two romances in the Sanctuary (SFA) fandom that want me to write them concurrently. In the meantime, I have notes for another SGA romance and another SFA romance. Now, thanks to asking some research questions on an SFA comm on LJ, I have an idea for another little one-shot. Then, there's my three OF stories, one of which is probably going into the circular file. AAARRRGGGHHH!!! But it could be worse--there could be no plot bunnies at all.sigpicSig by Bay, for my birthday. Find me on fanfiction.net, AO3, or fictionpress.com. If you are over 18, I invite you to read my blogs. On Blogger: Other Worlds, Other Loves On Wordpress: Other Worlds, Other Loves.Fennyman: "Who is that?" Henslowe: "Nobody. The author." (From Shakespeare in Love)
Comment
-
Originally posted by Whytewytch View PostThey nip, bite and occasionally tear the flesh. Honestly, they are like unregulated Nubbins ATM [SPOILERS](hope you watch Sanctuary--if not, think Tribbles with teeth). They are some randy little critters at times, as well.Price for Pain What do you mean violence isn't the answer?
Burn It All Away Blood moves the heavens. Fire purifies the land. Legends change worlds. Destiny burns.
Whiskey Tango Foxtrot Fiat justitia et pereat mundus. Fiat justitia ruat caelum.
All are PG-13, each with a single act of rated R violence. Adults situations and other, tamer violence.
Ficta voluptatis causa sint proxima veris
I'm creating a fan comic and I want input from as many fans as possible. Please PM me if you want the discord link. You can also chat, show off your own creations, and rp.
Comment
-
Originally posted by WraithRichard View PostTis is going to sound amazingly stupid, but that sounds like that MLP episode, Swarm of the Century.
Comment
-
Originally posted by Whytewytch View PostThey nip, bite and occasionally tear the flesh. Honestly, they are like unregulated Nubbins ATMSpoiler:(hope you watch Sanctuary--if not, think Tribbles with teeth). They are some randy little critters at times, as well. Right now, I am trying to finish the third in a trilogy for the Robin Hood BBC fandom, complete a multi-chap romance in the SGA fandom and have two romances in the Sanctuary (SFA) fandom that want me to write them concurrently. In the meantime, I have notes for another SGA romance and another SFA romance. Now, thanks to asking some research questions on an SFA comm on LJ, I have an idea for another little one-shot. Then, there's my three OF stories, one of which is probably going into the circular file. AAARRRGGGHHH!!! But it could be worse--there could be no plot bunnies at all.Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by SF_and_Coffee View PostThat's fine; just be aware that if you were writing for actual publication, your editor would change it. There are actual writing style rules that govern it, and it looks wrong to many of us when they aren't followed. I outlined why they work the way they do, and the reasons are logical. Titles aren't proper nouns when you put "the" in front of them; otherwise, we would captialize ALL nouns and our Writing would look like something out of the 18th century:
What that probably looks like to you is what stories with all the titles capitalized even when they aren't proper nouns looks like to a lot of other readers. Just something to consider. This is why the publishing industry and the craft of writing have standardized usages. If you were to go to your bookshelves or even open up the newspaper and read articles where there are military personnel referenced, you'll find that military titles are only capitalized when they are proper nouns. Does it look odd when you read it that way in a commercially-published novel?
In my experience, some [smaller] publishers and editors have some flexibility, especially if the author can articulate a reason for the way they've done something. And every publishing house has its own house style (which can be subject to the whims and preferences of the people who created it), which hardly makes the entire industry identical.
I don't read military fiction or anything of that sort, so I couldn't say if it bothers me. I don't think it really bothers me when I read Stargate fic. Like I said, I'm very flexible in this arena, and I explained the reasons behind my writerly decisions.
I looked up a couple Tom Clancy and other military books on amazon and there's a whole bunch of "the Captain" and "the Lieutenant"s being thrown around alongside "the captain." Seems not even all publishers, editors, and house styles agree on this.
Of everything to get peeved about or to agonize over correcting, this issue seems to me very minor. Whether it's the Colonel or the colonel, the reader's comprehension is in no way impeded.
Comment
-
I'm just saying, don't call something a proper noun when it isn't. Military titles cease to be proper nouns when they take "the" in front of them. You don't have to like it, but it's a pretty well-known rule of writing. You can use a noun like "man" to refer to someone who is known, and say that it's obviously substituting for the person's name, but that still doesn't mean that the word "man" would be a proper noun in that context and take a capital. "Sam looked up to see the Man walking toward her" just doesn't make sense when you look at it written out, does it? Well "the colonel" is equivalent to "the man" in that there are lots and lots of colonels running around in the military, even just within the SGC. Lots of men, too. Both are common nouns as long as you're using "the" in front of them, and common nouns don't get capitalized. Want to capitalize it? Then use it as a form of address, without using "the", or follow it with the colonel's actual name. Problem solved.
(And even small publishing houses follow a stylebook when they edit someone's manuscript. There is no stylebook I know of in which military titles are capitalized when being used as common nouns.)
The problem isn't one of disrupting reader comprehension, any more than having ten typos for every twenty words is, or continually misspelling a character's name or consistently forgetting to capitalize names like jack or sam or daniel (See? It's jarring, isn't it?), or getting the character's "voice" wrong in dialogue. The problem here is that typos, spelling errors and uncharacteristic voices all have a tendency to jar the reader out of the story or the scene so that they're noticing how you've written something rather than what you've written.
Originally posted by sbz View PostI looked up a couple Tom Clancy and other military books on amazon and there's a whole bunch of "the Captain" and "the Lieutenant"s being thrown around alongside "the captain." Seems not even all publishers, editors, and house styles agree on this.Sum, ergo scribo...
(Yes, I'm female. Okay?)
My own site ** FF.net * All That We Leave Behind * Symbiotica ** AO3
sigpic
now also appearing on DeviantArt
Explore Colonel Frank Cromwell's odyssey after falling through the Stargate in Season Two's A Matter of Time, and follow Jack's search for him. Significant Tok'ra supporting characters and a human culture drawn from the annals of history. Book One of the series By Honor Bound.
Comment
-
Originally posted by Feast of the Muse View PostIf MLP stands for My Little Pony you will have just made my day.Price for Pain What do you mean violence isn't the answer?
Burn It All Away Blood moves the heavens. Fire purifies the land. Legends change worlds. Destiny burns.
Whiskey Tango Foxtrot Fiat justitia et pereat mundus. Fiat justitia ruat caelum.
All are PG-13, each with a single act of rated R violence. Adults situations and other, tamer violence.
Ficta voluptatis causa sint proxima veris
I'm creating a fan comic and I want input from as many fans as possible. Please PM me if you want the discord link. You can also chat, show off your own creations, and rp.
Comment
Comment