Stargate Destiny- New Series Out the 17th of January

[captainpash]

Started reading. Looks good so far. Loved the teaser.

[Elite Anubis Guard]

That was a concern as the original was rather long..not so much a teaser than a..half an act.

If Geoff is doing a Making Of, you'll be able to read the scenes taken out of the teaser.

[captainpash]

Cool.

[Lt. Colonel Ryu Gaia]

The teaser was cool, although I don't know if the ancients were really all that much like that. Seems a little... a little more human than ancient. As for Act I, all I can say is that Dr. Jackson seemed a little out of character. Okay, a lot out of character. He would have pieced together what happenned first, used the Ancient device, read what it had to say, and then said something like "I've got to get to Landry about this," whipped out his cell phone, and by the end of the conversation, told Andrews that they were going to the ISGC headquarters.
Still reading, and it shows promise.

Now I've read Act II. O'Neill is also a little out of character - he'd probably have said "How'd you like your own spaceship?" Other then that, it's pretty good, although the pacing of it seems slightly off.

[lionel_pendergast_rocks]

Hmm, now that you mention it, that would've been a better line for oneill. Damn, thats good!

[Lt. Colonel Ryu Gaia]

Still time to change it.

I'd take that as a hint to potentially ask to join the staff, but right now I want to see how things turn out with Horizon first.

Read Act III. O'Neill should have said "Good luck," not "Godspeed." Doesn't seem important, but godspeed is Hammond's thing.

Other then that, it's pretty good so far. Although, I do have a major criticism from much earlier on - the meeting at which they decided to do this. It should not have only involved USAF officials. We're talking ISGC, not SGC. Big difference.

Read Act IV. I have to say, the Malecathi don't seem particularly threatening, and the battle fell short of what I hoped for. I really hope it gets better... it pains me to say it, but I may have expected too much of Destiny. But I'm nowhere near done, so I won't judge yet.

Just a note, Takeshi is way too Americanized.

Finished Act V. Well, to start with, if Tenyris has only heard of the great Malecathi ships in legends and such, he shouldn't know so much about them. It's not plausible, and it feels akward to read such an obvious inconsistancy. The Malecathi really don't seem threatening, and I'm already getting the feeling that they're too much like the Wraith. On top of that, they seem too... well, the concept is overused. Ancient enemy in a galaxy... attacks everything for no reason... there's no motivation, they're not a powerful enemy. Where there is no will to attack there should not be an attack, unless their pure incarnate evil, and if they were, they'd be operating on a more face-to-face front to inflict fear and pain upon the enemy.

Yeah, I'm starting to be disappointed by now. I'm sorry...

[Esquin]

Well Tekashi's Americanisation comes from living in America. As fo the Malecathi being unthreatening, rad mroe fo the episode and hopefully you will change your mind. Obviously we don't want to reveal all the Malecathi intentions all at once, but lets jsut say they have some interesting motivations.

[Lt. Colonel Ryu Gaia]

Of course you don't, but you certainly want to make them threatening by the end of the first episode. I mean, they seem like a joke.

[captainpash]

I have been reading some of it, and I have to say that I don't lap up screenplays like a would a novel, but I am starting to have some doubts. The established characters are off, but you guys won't be using them that much, so it doesn't matter. I will wait untill I have finished before I can pass judgement.

[Lt. Colonel Ryu Gaia]

Yeah... I'm on Act VIII and I'm starting to have some serious doubts. This show needs a lot of improvement.

[Aris Boch]

I've just finished act five. My goodness its long? If anything its lacked so far its character development but that can be hard when doing first episodes. The descriptions of camera angles are very particular. If the show had a director of photography he wouldn't have much to do. But maybe I'm exaggerating things. It has been good considering the fact it is a first episode so there are certain things you have to get out of the way. I'm looking forward to the rest.

[Elite Anubis Guard]

So, you don't like dangerous enemies? I'd give up reading this is I was you.

[captainpash]

Yeah you guys do to much camera angle work. You really shouldn't I only do it when it is curical like to show faces or people. I just say that the camera is showing us the people who are talking, and if I am doing action I have it so that everyone realizes that the camera is watching all that is going on, but I don't go into too much detail. It tends to bog down a script. You have to find a balance.

[Lt. Colonel Ryu Gaia]

So, you don't like dangerous enemies? I'd give up reading this is I was you.

Dangerous enemies, I have no problem with. I'm just not a fan of pointless ones.

[captainpash]

Anyways I will read the next episode because I want to see if they improve.