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It looks like WIB is an "afternoon story." By that, I mean that it flows in the afternoons. (All my stories have their own time of day. Most of them are morning stories, but sometimes they'll be afternoon stories. I've even had those rare stories that don't want to let me write them until around 8:30 PM. Those ones can be frustrating!)
I don't do this often, but sometimes I feel the need to describe where characters live just to get the feel of the story. With fanfic, that's not normally necessary because people who read it know what Atlantis looks like. In this one, though, is such a unique setting that I'm using descriptions to take up word count.
I don't do this often, but sometimes I feel the need to describe where characters live just to get the feel of the story. With fanfic, that's not normally necessary because people who read it know what Atlantis looks like. In this one, though, is such a unique setting that I'm using descriptions to take up word count.
Hey, I did it with BtS, I don't see why you shouldn't do it for WIB.
Hey, I did it with BtS, I don't see why you shouldn't do it for WIB.
Again, they're unusual settings. One of the things I learned about description was not to describe something from a character's POV who knows the setting. Carson doesn't know this setting.
Again, they're unusual settings. One of the things I learned about description was not to describe something from a character's POV who knows the setting. Carson doesn't know this setting.
I didn't notice you describing a lot that Carson would typically know. When describing a familiar area with a character, a lot of authors do it from an unusual angle, like Carson's POV from the hospital bed rather than being the doctor.
And Mrs. Porter is turning out cheeky, blunt, and utterly endearing. She's already adopted Carson and is feeding him, and he barely arrived! But that's always been how I see her. Kind of the older grandma character who's slightly pushy but in a lovable, totally harmless way.
I didn't notice you describing a lot that Carson would typically know. When describing a familiar area with a character, a lot of authors do it from an unusual angle, like Carson's POV from the hospital bed rather than being the doctor.
And Mrs. Porter is turning out cheeky, blunt, and utterly endearing. She's already adopted Carson and is feeding him, and he barely arrived! But that's always been how I see her. Kind of the older grandma character who's slightly pushy but in a lovable, totally harmless way.
I love those types of Moms! I wish I'd had one. LOL
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