Originally posted by YappiChick
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All right, Multiplicity is up and complete. There are a total of ten chapters...the link is to chapter 8. I hope y'all like the ending. 
Now I'm taking a writing break.
Now I'm taking a writing break.
Originally posted by YappiChick
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I'm glad you liked it. I'm still a bit iffy on the ending. But for those of you who have read the whole thing, this was the original ending:
So, which ending did y'all prefer?
Spoiler:
The five minutes passed slowly for everyone in the room. Finally, the floor of the platform lit up and one John Sheppard appeared. Carson walked up to him. “Colonel, how are you feeling?”
He looked around. “Good, I guess,” he answered slowly. “But what are all of you doing down here?”
Rodney and Elizabeth exchanged a glance, Teyla and Ronan looked at each other. “What do you mean, John?“ Elizabeth asked.
“Well, last thing I remember is me stepping on that platform.” He turned to Zelenka. “You were telling me it would take months to be able to work this thing.”
“Rodney,” Elizabeth said, worry in her voice. “What happened?“
McKay thought for a moment before snapping his fingers. “I think I know what he did. It’s rather ingenious if I say so myself. I think they all decided not to remember. If they did that, then it’s possible that the filter would erase all their memories.”
John started to look a little panicked. “What are you guys talking about?“
Carson walked up to him. “Colonel, you stepped on the platform yesterday. Quite a bit has happened since then.”
He looked at Elizabeth and winced. “I’m in trouble, aren’t I?”
She smiled briefly. “We’ll worry about that later. Right now, go to the infirmary. I want a full report on your condition after Carson looks at you.”
“All right,“ he said slowly. He hated being in the dark about things. Wanting to be near people he was comfortable with, he made his way to Teyla and Ronan.
Ronan grabbed his shoulder. “Good to see you, Sheppard. All one of you.”
John shook his head. “When is someone going to tell me what exactly happened?”
Teyla looked at him a bit sadly. “Perhaps it is best that you do not remember what happened, Colonel.“
Damn. Now he really wished he knew what happened. He hadn’t seen Teyla that upset since he left for Earth. He leaned closer to her. “Did I do something to upset you?”
She flashed a small smile, despite the situation. “No, Colonel, not at all. You should go to the infirmary soon. I am sure that Carson will tell you what happened.” She walked out of the room.
Ronan looked at his friend and shook his head. “Boy, Sheppard, if I were you, I’d be regretting that decision to forget everything.”
“But, I don’t remember anything!”
He looked around. “Good, I guess,” he answered slowly. “But what are all of you doing down here?”
Rodney and Elizabeth exchanged a glance, Teyla and Ronan looked at each other. “What do you mean, John?“ Elizabeth asked.
“Well, last thing I remember is me stepping on that platform.” He turned to Zelenka. “You were telling me it would take months to be able to work this thing.”
“Rodney,” Elizabeth said, worry in her voice. “What happened?“
McKay thought for a moment before snapping his fingers. “I think I know what he did. It’s rather ingenious if I say so myself. I think they all decided not to remember. If they did that, then it’s possible that the filter would erase all their memories.”
John started to look a little panicked. “What are you guys talking about?“
Carson walked up to him. “Colonel, you stepped on the platform yesterday. Quite a bit has happened since then.”
He looked at Elizabeth and winced. “I’m in trouble, aren’t I?”
She smiled briefly. “We’ll worry about that later. Right now, go to the infirmary. I want a full report on your condition after Carson looks at you.”
“All right,“ he said slowly. He hated being in the dark about things. Wanting to be near people he was comfortable with, he made his way to Teyla and Ronan.
Ronan grabbed his shoulder. “Good to see you, Sheppard. All one of you.”
John shook his head. “When is someone going to tell me what exactly happened?”
Teyla looked at him a bit sadly. “Perhaps it is best that you do not remember what happened, Colonel.“
Damn. Now he really wished he knew what happened. He hadn’t seen Teyla that upset since he left for Earth. He leaned closer to her. “Did I do something to upset you?”
She flashed a small smile, despite the situation. “No, Colonel, not at all. You should go to the infirmary soon. I am sure that Carson will tell you what happened.” She walked out of the room.
Ronan looked at his friend and shook his head. “Boy, Sheppard, if I were you, I’d be regretting that decision to forget everything.”
“But, I don’t remember anything!”
So, which ending did y'all prefer?
Spoiler:
I prefer the ending you decided on to go with on ff.net. At least there is definite progression in positivitiy!!! There other way would have been to much like the show for me if it did not happen. It is very good the way they decided!!
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