Fan Fiction Discussion and Analysis

[puddlejumperOZ]

This new thread is for all Gateworld Authors who wish to discuss and disect their stories and those off others if they wish. It will also be THE thread for those entering in the competitions to discuss those as well.

Simple rules, no OFF TOPIC chit chat, and no flaming, or putting others down, or insults. That will not be tolerated here. Have fun.

[puddlejumperOZ]

And congratulations to Akamaimon for winning the First round of the Competition

[Aragon101]

I have my ficlet for the new competition ready to go, but i have a grammar issue im' not sure about.

i have two characters giving rather large monologues, and i want to avoid the huge block of text of doom. Is there some way to punctuate it so it's still the same person speaking but with paragraphs? It's been bugging me for days and i can't seem to get a straight answer (what i'd give to have my old english teacher around)

If anyone can assist, i'd be most gracious

[Draygon]

I think I'm going to require some research before writing one for the new comptertition that or watch lots more techno scenes

[puddlejumperOZ]

Sam send me a email on what you have and I'll see what I can do for for you

Dray there is a megaton of stuff out there you can find, and humour works best especially where technobabble is concerned, Rodney is a good target, and I'm sure you find a lot of stuff on him. R2 can probably help you there, or one of the "Other guys"

[Draygon]

Nah, my brother is a technowizz, as is my boyfriend. I'll badger them for knowledge

[puddlejumperOZ]

Nah, my brother is a technowizz, as is my boyfriend. I'll badger them for knowledge

There you go, the story is half done

[Aragon101]

Sam send me a email on what you have and I'll see what I can do for for you

Dray there is a megaton of stuff out there you can find, and humour works best especially where technobabble is concerned, Rodney is a good target, and I'm sure you find a lot of stuff on him. R2 can probably help you there, or one of the "Other guys"

Sent and you can even give me your thoughts as you might find it interesting I'm not sure how that would actually work though... two characters, one berating and one explaining, in large blocks of text Someone? Anyone?

[puddlejumperOZ]

A day or so and I'll have it fully autopsied for you

[sbz]

I have my ficlet for the new competition ready to go, but i have a grammar issue im' not sure about.

i have two characters giving rather large monologues, and i want to avoid the huge block of text of doom. Is there some way to punctuate it so it's still the same person speaking but with paragraphs? It's been bugging me for days and i can't seem to get a straight answer (what i'd give to have my old english teacher around)

If anyone can assist, i'd be most gracious

It's quite simple. You don't close the quotation marks at the end of the paragraph if the same character is still speaking in the next paragraph. So it would look like this:

"Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.

"Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah."

[puddlejumperOZ]

^^^ Ah yes that may be true to a point, but if you wish to reduce a very long dialogue, it's best to insert some action sequence midway such as.

"Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah. He then jumped up from his chair and turned to her. He wasn't finished yet.

"Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah." After that he needed a drink, and he slumped back down again.

[EllieVee]

^^^ Ah yes that may be true to a point, but if you wish to reduce a very long dialogue, it's best to insert some action sequence midway such as.

"Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah. He then jumped up from his chair and turned to her. He wasn't finished yet.

"Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah." After that he needed a drink, and he slumped back down again.

Or ...

"Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah."

He jumped up from his chair, turning to her; he wasn't finished yet.

"Blah blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah."

After that he needed a drink, slumping back down again.

Also, can we spell analysis correctly? It's hurting my eyes.

[Aragon101]

^^^ Ah yes that may be true to a point, but if you wish to reduce a very long dialogue, it's best to insert some action sequence midway such as.

"Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah. He then jumped up from his chair and turned to her. He wasn't finished yet.

"Blah blah blah blah.Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah. Blah blah blah blah." After that he needed a drink, and he slumped back down again.

Well it depends on the tone of the monologue, you saw what i had, i did have some "action" amid the conversation, but it isn't the type of conversation to easily have that.

For those wondering, my fic is quite literally Sam Carter coming to John Sheppard with a complaint, and she has a minor rant at him which is why it's a long monologue. John then replies in kind with a monologue of his own defending himself. Then Ronon shows up and unwittingly creates chaos but that's for the fic

It's meant to be a very civilized discussion with Sam venting, then John defending, they're both solid enough on their positions not to interrupt the other and want to know the other's position.

[Princess Awinita]

Hmmm... technobabble story for us ladies, and ship fun for the guys? Hmmm.. if I start writing a technobable story, be ready for a lot of reading!!

[thekillman]

TBH i think it's interesting but i just utterly suck at shipping.