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    Default Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    So I just need to know if this a decent idea...

    A new Earth ship, the Phoebus, heads to Atlantis to deliver important devices, when they discover the Wraith experimenting with technologies not only beyond their understanding, but the Ancients' as well. When they attempt to stop them in fear of the results, the ship gets caught in a horrible crossfire that sends them to another galaxy. Badly damaged, the ship crash-lands on a battle-scarred city ship that has been abandoned for thousands of years.
    In a desperate attempt to get home, the surviving members of the crew hope to find a solution out somewhere out in the Pices Galaxy, but make a bittersweet discovery... the Ancients are still alive. Yet when the first team locates a group of them, they are met with brutal force. The idea that these rouge Ancients, are really Replicators, falls through when they then discover two Ancients in stasis, the last survivors of the city that the Phoebus crashed into, Ithis.
    In their right mind, they explain that when the Ancients left the Milky Way, they went to Pegasus, and Pices, in order to make sure that their numbers could remain intact due to any unforseeable circumstances that could come up. Pices lived in prosperity until, without warning, many of the Pices Ancients contracted some sort of "paranoia," believing that everyone was their enemy, except for their own kind. They proceeded to wipe out the humans seeded throughout the galaxy, when they also discovered that one city was immune to the paranoia effects... it was Ithis.
    Thinking that the Ithians were also their enemy, the Ancients wiped them out as they did everyone else, but only after 1/4 of Ithis' population spread out into hidden stasis chambers throughout the galaxy. It was the Phoebus' luck to happen upon one of these chambers and uncover the truth about these rogue Ancients. But now the crew faces ultimate doom at the hands of their unexpected enemy, when their location is revealed, and the Ancients decide to "free themselves" of the last of their enemies.
    Yet unknown to the crew, it wasn't coincidence that they landed in the Pices Galaxy, and that there is also an unseen enemy, pulling the strings behind the fate... of the last Ancients.

    I am so sorry if there are any grammar or spelling errors... I typed this up very quickly, and I'm a little feverish right now. I also felt that I might have been repetitive, but please, critique the idea!
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Me like, mostly. I really do think it is a good idea. However, virtual series, short fanfic, long almost novel length fanfic, a series of short or long fanfics, or a virtual movie?

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    I would love to make it into a virtual series!
    I have episode titles and short summaries (always subject to change) for about six seasons...

    Sadly I lack the resources, and the time.
    But I am definately going to try!

    And something else that's difficult is to make it STAND OUT!

    And thank you by the way.

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    mobie, definatly make it a movie. reminds me of I am legend for some reson. maube have these paranoid ancheints with rever traits, i don't think any one has ever done an horon SG fic. call me if u need spacs for anything.
    then have a serie off the movie. mauybe like razor, have a movie to kick off the series.

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    If I could make this a reality, I would actually consider using a movie to wrap up the series... because there are some arcs I have in mind, that sort of move away from the whole basis of the series. But I don't know... that's somthing very far off.

    And not to go off topic too much, but what is, "I am Legend?"
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Quote Originally Posted by PhantomGasoline View Post
    If I could make this a reality, I would actually consider using a movie to wrap up the series... because there are some arcs I have in mind, that sort of move away from the whole basis of the series. But I don't know... that's somthing very far off.

    And not to go off topic too much, but what is, "I am Legend?"
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C2fWJ...eature=related
    I am legend

    yes it is a move from th etraditional stargate theme, but everyting has been done in other web series, just throwing something original out there.

    Got me thinking here, what do you guys think of a post apocalyptic stargate. ship gets blasted into the future where humanity is extinct, and the galaxy lives in fear of some desease that turns infectees into vampiric creatures.

    this reminds me of a cheap sci fi movie i saw: Bloodsuckes. this is one of my favorite quotes: OnEarth they ruled the night... In space, they reign supreme.

    stupid i know, but what can i do?

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Right now, I just need positive feedback for my idea... so if you're just tuning in, look to the top!

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Quote Originally Posted by PhantomGasoline View Post
    Right now, I just need positive feedback for my idea... so if you're just tuning in, look to the top!
    well, it's got my official seal of aproval.

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Ty ty.

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    fantasic idea
    but why abandon all our current actors and settings for a new ship and galaxy
    why not use a quantum mirror or a rouge gruop of travellers that left the galaxy and later returned all supped up

    ive been toying with ideas too and ive got one for you
    i started a story for the sgc video comm online a while back and im waiting for a reply from a friend but it might fit in with your story as well
    but its got fifth in it
    its such an open start that anyone could use it anywhere
    write me if you want to see it
    Last edited by avidffan; December 1st, 2007 at 02:57 PM. Reason: thought

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    I'd love to make it a new Stargate series like Stargate Horizon or Stargate Destiny.
    New faces, places, and ideas.
    I know MANY people are doing it... which is why people are sick of different series popping up... but why not try?

    It really has nothing to do with Earth, which is why I'm not using SG-1 or Atlantis actors. Which also means I'm not using any of the settings... except for the first episode where the new ship is en route to Atlantis.

    And like Stargate Universe, I'm trying to make it a third leg. Although there are still traces of the original Stargate in it... overall, it's completley independent. This way, I could have my series within any part of the official Stargate timeline.

    And I'm not sure what you mean by the inclusion of Fifth. You may have misunderstood my use of the replicators. There are NO replicators, they just thought that these paranoid Ancients might be the Pegasus Asurans, but they were proved wrong.

    I'm sorry if I'm misunderstanding you in any way... all I know is that we're on different wavelengths... and... once again, I'm sorry. Please don't take this the wrong way, I'm just not comprehending what you're saying.

    I'd still love to hear your idea though!

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    ok now i understand
    you want it to be a stand alone storyline
    ok cool
    once you read it youll undersatand
    and if you dont then ill explain in greater detail

    heres the openning :

    here we go

    AAAAEEEEIIIIIIYYYYYYEEEEEE
    my eyes
    wake up were free
    he shakes his friend out of sleep
    how long has it been
    how many days years millennia have passed
    waiting for our chance at freedom
    how long have we been asleep
    I dont know
    but we must find out if we won the war and where we are
    or if weve only been awakened for death
    i know i know but i must know how long first

    jatis sits down and scrambling for the controls he activates the veiwscreen
    a huge map appears lighting up the entire complex
    he beats at the controls how long how long the screen grows ever brighter
    UNIVERSAL SCANNER ONLINE ACQUIREING TARGETS
    taden walks over and stops dead in his tracks as he sees the full extent of their imprisonment
    thousands and thousands of lights flash an ominous message

    OUTPOST ABANDONED
    OUTPOST OFFLINE
    OUTPOST DESTORYED
    NO CONTACT
    NO SIGNAL
    NO RESPONSE
    EMERGENCY EVACUATION BEGUN
    STATUS UNKNOWN
    STATUS UNKNOWN

    Over and over and over it flashes

    he falls to his knees pulling the chair over with him
    tears fill up both their eyes
    taden and jatis begin to scream with blinding rage and unending aguish
    all of it was a waste
    weve lost it all
    everyone is dead
    everything gone
    they both collapse on the floor
    the revival process and the pain of their new life is too much for them

    several hours later taden awakes and revives jatis
    were all alone now but have we won the war or has time passed us all by
    check the chronograph for our place in time and the map for our location in the universe
    wait what is this
    taden runs his hands through a pile of silvery metallic dust on the floor
    forget that who is that in one of our pods
    move the pod into the air lock and stand by the controls ill set the automatic revival process
    slowly the stranger emerges from the stasis pod and walks over to the control panel
    but instead of placing his hand on the panel he just puts his hand through the wall and melts into it then melts out the other side
    i am fifth


    story ends here :

    see what i mean its pretty wide open it could go in any direction you want
    it fits your story as well in that youve two people waking up from a long stasis sleep that they entered to avoid a war

    get back to me if you want any help with ideas
    im kinda brimming over with them
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Quote Originally Posted by avidfan View Post
    ok now i understand
    you want it to be a stand alone storyline
    Yes, I'm sorry I didn't make that clear sooner! My bad.

    And brilliant, brilliant, brilliant story!
    I thought it was great.
    Not great for the storyline I'm aiming for, but you should do something with it.
    Keep me posted.
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    fraking awsome dudes, really comfusing, but still ausome.

    my feed back on stargate virtual series:
    PLEASE STOP!
    there are too many unoriginal ones out there. wve seen finding the anchients, weve seen time travel, weve seen a lot of repetitive stuff. i say we let extint species RIP. they deserve that at least. what seems to have never been done is an SG series with hard core realistic physics, and i've never seen a series that really sends chils down my spine since, well, ever.
    IMO: look to firefly for guidance. I am a rock on the wind, Watch how i drop!

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    ok here you go
    a possible opening to your movie using my story as a start
    im a very visual kind of person so writting what im seeing in my head is somtines hard and harder to read so sorry but read on and keep up ill go through the first couple minutes for you or us if you want to work together




    AAAAEEEEIIIIIIYYYYYYEEEEEE
    my eyes
    wake up were free
    he shakes his friend out of sleep
    how long has it been
    how many days years millennia have passed
    waiting for our chance at freedom
    how long have we been asleep
    I dont know
    but we must find out if we won the war and where we are
    or if weve only been awakened for death
    i know i know but i must know how long first

    jatis sits down and scrambling for the controls he activates the veiwscreen
    a huge map appears lighting up the entire complex
    he beats at the controls how long how long the screen grows ever brighter
    UNIVERSAL SCANNER ONLINE ACQUIREING TARGETS
    taden walks over and stops dead in his tracks as he sees the full extent of their imprisonment
    thousands and thousands of lights flash an ominous message

    OUTPOST ABANDONED
    OUTPOST OFFLINE
    OUTPOST DESTORYED
    NO CONTACT
    NO SIGNAL
    NO RESPONSE
    EMERGENCY EVACUATION BEGUN
    STATUS UNKNOWN
    STATUS UNKNOWN

    Over and over and over it flashes

    he falls to his knees pulling the chair over with him
    tears fill up both their eyes
    taden and jatis begin to scream with blinding rage and unending aguish
    all of it was a waste
    weve lost it all
    everyone is dead
    everything gone
    they both collapse on the floor
    the revival process and the pain of their new life is too much for them

    several hours later taden awakes and revives jatis
    were all alone now but have we won the war or has time passed us all by
    check the chronograph for our place in time and the map for our location in the universe

    wait what is this
    all the screens start to flash something different
    as they walk over to check a loud noise comes from somewhere deep in the complex but they cant pin it down
    as they reach the scanner it reads in brilliant bright letters
    SHIP DOCKED
    HUMAN LIFEORMS
    ASGUARD SIMILAR TECHNOLOGY FOUND
    SHIP DOCKED
    ASGUARD SIMILAR TECHNOLOGY FOUND
    HUMAN LIFEORMS CLOSE PROXIMITY

    that would be us
    suddenly the screen is longer important as the two of them are slowly surrounded by the crew of the Phoebus

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    fraking awsome dudes, really comfusing, but still ausome.

    my feed back on stargate virtual series:
    PLEASE STOP!
    there are too many unoriginal ones out there. wve seen finding the anchients, weve seen time travel, weve seen a lot of repetitive stuff. i say we let extint species RIP. they deserve that at least. what seems to have never been done is an SG series with hard core realistic physics, and i've never seen a series that really sends chils down my spine since, well, ever.
    IMO: look to firefly for guidance. I am a rock on the wind, Watch how i drop!
    As much as I want this to happen... it will take a long time to become reality... so don't worry... you won't have tobe concerned about me (anytime soon that is ).
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Quote Originally Posted by PhantomGasoline View Post
    As much as I want this to happen... it will take a long time to become reality... so don't worry... you won't have tobe concerned about me (anytime soon that is ).
    so...ur wrighting it? well, hmm...maybee...HOw many wrighters so you have?

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Quote Originally Posted by Crazy Tom View Post
    fraking awsome dudes, really comfusing, but still ausome.

    my feed back on stargate virtual series:
    PLEASE STOP!
    there are too many unoriginal ones out there. wve seen finding the anchients, weve seen time travel, weve seen a lot of repetitive stuff. i say we let extint species RIP. they deserve that at least. what seems to have never been done is an SG series with hard core realistic physics, and i've never seen a series that really sends chils down my spine since, well, ever.
    IMO: look to firefly for guidance. I am a rock on the wind, Watch how i drop!
    thanks for the kind words

    sorry its kinda hard to read i just write and dont bother with grammar and punctuation my wife doesnt like it either

    but phantomgasoline wants to revive the ancients i just showed them how my short stoy start could be rewritten a little to start their story

    as for chills down your spine most tv execs dont believe the general public is smart enough for them

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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    Everyone...

    I plan on writing the first episode when I get the time, and that won't be until summer... and even then, it will take me a while to write an episode I'm comfortable with showing everyone. Even then, I'll need to find make a website to put it on... which I have no idea how to do... (not trying to whine, just stating the facts)

    SO ALL IN ALL: This will take some time.
    I just need to do it on my own terms, in my own way.
    Thank you for the ideas but...

    The purpose of this thread is to get some positive or negative comments on the overall idea.

    And then... if they are mostly positive, I will consider to put this on the internet. But either way I will be writing these episodes for my own posterity and fun.

    Plus, there's no way to know that people will like a new virtual series or not if you don't give it a try!
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    Default Re: Shoot me down if you wish... but please... don't! :D

    I'm only saying this because... no offense... I'm getting REALLY confused with the way this thread has gone...
    When did I get a movie too?
    I was talking about wrapping up my series with a movie, but not to open.

    It all takes place within the same timeline as Stargate Atlantis (that is whenever I get around to writing it). It starts off in the Pegasus Galaxy, where they find the Wraith, and their experiments send them to another galaxy. And I would like for it to be a virtual series from there

    I'm not trying to be mean, but I think we've all gotten lost (especially me).
    ESPECIALLY ME! lol...
    Not to sound cliché from an earlier post, but, we're all on different wavelengths.
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