After three days of work, I made a complete outline to my SGA fic. Well, the first fic in the (hopefully) trilogy. Alas, none of my fic-writing buddies watch SGA, so I need opinions from an outside source.
The fic is a General/Drama story. At first, it centers around the team, but in the second 'book' it'll be more McKay-centric. While there is an original character introduced, she is by no means a Mary-Sue/perfect girl.
Let me know what you guys think. (I have to seperate the outline into too posts because it's so big.)
'Standing Outside a Fire' outline
Part One ::: Turbulent Winds
1. The Scarlet Tempest
2. The Flight of the Zephyr
3. Caution to the Wind
4. Preserving the Last Tsunami
5. Settling in with Sea Airs
I: "The Scarlet Tempest"
1. Surely 13 isn't unlucky all the time...
a- AGX-013 is a desert world with the Stargate placed a mile outside a village in an oasis. AG1 is sent there for standard intell/diplomatic purposes.
b- Team travels to the village of Ju'umsu, where they are welcomed heartily. They are brought directly to Elder Akito, leader of the society and temple. He is a man about 55 - 60. He explains that they are a quiet, self-sufficent people.
2. The invitation to the Festival.
a- Akito tells the group that two days from then, a annual festival is to take place. The festival is in honor of the Gecenadi Ritual that will take place the night of the event. It is a custom to restore fertility and luck to the land, supposively to keep the Oasis's spring bringing water.
b- Akito thinks the AG1 a sign of good tides and invites them to attend. After consoling with Weir, they agree so to start a bond with the Yunan's.
3. Truth about the Gecenadi Ritual revealed.
a- While wandering the marketplace, Teyla and Ford overhear gossip about the Gecenadi Ritual.
b- Gecenadi means fortune in Yunan language. The ritual itself involves a human sacrifice of an 'unlucky' villager, determined by the Elder Akito. The sacrifice is killed by a traditional cutting of several areas.
1- Areas: From chin to collarbone, from left shoulder to right, one across each temple, from each palm to the elbow joint, and a silver sword is thrust into the diaphragm/stomache area. c- The blood from the Gecenadi sacrifice is cleansed and sealed into a jar made from the spring's clay and buried on the spring's shore.
d- Now aware of the details of the horrific event, Teyla and Ford quickly return to their lodging to share the news.
II: "Flight of the Zephyr"
1. A lost key.
a- Sheppard and McKay stay at the inn while Teyla and Ford check out the market.
b- Things don't stay quiet long. Soon, yelling can be heard in the normally quiet street outside. The two remaining members of AG1 decide to see what's causing the trouble.
c- Elder Akito is yelling at the Ju'umsu Temple priests to go find a runaway girl, Sheedra the Zephyr. Apprently, the girl (only 7 years of age) was in the Temple's care for an unspecified role in the Gecenadi Ritual when she ran away. According to Akito, this is the fourth time she's escaped.
d- After some logic from McKay and Sheppard, Akito accepts AG1's promise to help find her in the morning since the night make the task of hunting down a child nigh impossible. They retire to their rooms again.
2. Putting the pieces together.
a- AG1 reunites in their room and relays to each other the two tales.
b- It becomes obvious that whoever this Zephyr girl is, she's in mortal danger and fled because of it.
c- McKay suggests they find her before the Ju'umsun priests can to protect her from the fate. Then they could confront Akito concerning the sacrifical rite.
d- The group agrees and goes to sleep immediantly so they can wake up before sunrise and begin the search.
3. Reason behind the name.
a- The entire team wakes early and splits off as they had been before (since Sheppard is the only person who can handle McKay's additude). Teyla and Ford head to the rocky desert area, Sheppard and McKay to the grassy Oasis lake.
b- Hours tick by with no sign of the missing girl.
c- Near the point of giving up, McKay sees a glimpse of something translucent looking from the corner of his eye. He focuses on the 'empty' spot to finally find a girl sitting there, looking nervous. Once McKay points her out, Sheppard jumps, shocked to have not seen her there. He radios Teyla and Ford to their location before questioning the girl.
d- Surprisingly, the first questioned asked is how she managed to hide in plain sight. Sheedra sheepishly admits it's magic of her family that makes people 'blind' to the user. She apologizes repeatedly for decieving them.
1- The reason Sheedra is called the Zephyr is that her family, all now deceased, was the last of the ancient Yunan Wind Clan. All were taught how to 'blind' people. Since that made them so difficult to find, they were said to be harder to catch than a wind. From that point on, all of the WInd Clan were given nicknames based on winds. (Sheedra's father, Jeequen, was called Tempest; Her mother was Breeze.)
4. Deciding between wind and water.
a- They group returns to the temple with Sheedra. Akito instantly locks the girl in a backroom, much to AG1's protests. The team demand an explanation. Akito tiredly agrees.
b- The Gecanadi Ritual involves what the Yunan's consider unfortunate; someone of little physical beauty. Sheedra was choosen for this because of a cut across her forehead (normally concealed by a cloak she wears) that became infected. Above her left eye is a harsh magenta-blue area from the infection.
c- Ford points out that they could fix the infection with the help of Dr. Beckett. Akito turns down the offer nervously. When they try to convince him, Teyla realizes something.
d- Elder Akito cannot allow Sheedra to be healed because it would weaken his hold over the people because they'd be disbelieving of the effectiveness behind the Gecenadi Ritual. He'd lose power.
e- Outraged, Akito has AG1 escourted out of the temple. He warns them that if they plan to attend to ceremony tomorrow night, they'd do well to behave themselves.
f- The team reports the situation to Weir, asking permission to scrap the diplotmat job to save the innocent girl, effectively making enemies of the Yunan people.
III. "Caution to the Wind"
1. Opposition at Home
a- Weir turns them down without hesistation, claiming they need more allies in the Pegasus Galaxy. Sheppard and Teyla launch into a debate with Weir, trying to convince her to reconsider.
b- When Sheppard lets slip he'll go back and rescue her without permission, Weir orders the group quarantined in the hospital wing for the next 24 hours. Weapons confinscated, AG1 is lead by gunpoint to Beckett's area.
2. A Friend in Need
a- Locked up in the infirmary, the group admits defeat.
b- Except McKay. The usually self-centered astrophysist pleads with his Scottish friend to let them go. Beckett reluctantly says no, not wanting to get in trouble for defying a direct order, whatever the reason.
c- Asking to speak to him in private McKay explains the situation to Beckett, practically begging for his help. Beckett agrees on the condition they find a way to keep him out of trouble. Idea forming, McKay sends Beckett to his research lab to grab the Wraith Stunner he was experimenting on.
d- As he hands over the alien weapon, Beckett realizes what they're gonna do too late. He tries to turn tail and run but Sheppard shoots the medical doctor in the back. The group hauls the unconscience Beckett onto the examination table, McKay breifly apologizes to his friend before they leave for the armory, then the Jumper bay.
3. First Defiance, Then Trickery, Now Thievery?
a- Arriving at the Jumper Bay, fortunately deserted, the crew flies Puddle Jumper 6 to the gateroom, cloaked.
1- They choose JP6 because it's on the second level, therefore anyone briefly looking inside won't notice it gone. b- Ford has second thoughts about defying the order from Weir. Sheppard, having gotten a black mark before, tells him he can leave. McKay and Teyla voice that they're staying to save Sheedra, whatever the consquences. Ford calms down and agrees.
The fic is a General/Drama story. At first, it centers around the team, but in the second 'book' it'll be more McKay-centric. While there is an original character introduced, she is by no means a Mary-Sue/perfect girl.
Let me know what you guys think. (I have to seperate the outline into too posts because it's so big.)
'Standing Outside a Fire' outline
Part One ::: Turbulent Winds
1. The Scarlet Tempest
2. The Flight of the Zephyr
3. Caution to the Wind
4. Preserving the Last Tsunami
5. Settling in with Sea Airs
I: "The Scarlet Tempest"
1. Surely 13 isn't unlucky all the time...
a- AGX-013 is a desert world with the Stargate placed a mile outside a village in an oasis. AG1 is sent there for standard intell/diplomatic purposes.
b- Team travels to the village of Ju'umsu, where they are welcomed heartily. They are brought directly to Elder Akito, leader of the society and temple. He is a man about 55 - 60. He explains that they are a quiet, self-sufficent people.
2. The invitation to the Festival.
a- Akito tells the group that two days from then, a annual festival is to take place. The festival is in honor of the Gecenadi Ritual that will take place the night of the event. It is a custom to restore fertility and luck to the land, supposively to keep the Oasis's spring bringing water.
b- Akito thinks the AG1 a sign of good tides and invites them to attend. After consoling with Weir, they agree so to start a bond with the Yunan's.
3. Truth about the Gecenadi Ritual revealed.
a- While wandering the marketplace, Teyla and Ford overhear gossip about the Gecenadi Ritual.
b- Gecenadi means fortune in Yunan language. The ritual itself involves a human sacrifice of an 'unlucky' villager, determined by the Elder Akito. The sacrifice is killed by a traditional cutting of several areas.
1- Areas: From chin to collarbone, from left shoulder to right, one across each temple, from each palm to the elbow joint, and a silver sword is thrust into the diaphragm/stomache area. c- The blood from the Gecenadi sacrifice is cleansed and sealed into a jar made from the spring's clay and buried on the spring's shore.
d- Now aware of the details of the horrific event, Teyla and Ford quickly return to their lodging to share the news.
II: "Flight of the Zephyr"
1. A lost key.
a- Sheppard and McKay stay at the inn while Teyla and Ford check out the market.
b- Things don't stay quiet long. Soon, yelling can be heard in the normally quiet street outside. The two remaining members of AG1 decide to see what's causing the trouble.
c- Elder Akito is yelling at the Ju'umsu Temple priests to go find a runaway girl, Sheedra the Zephyr. Apprently, the girl (only 7 years of age) was in the Temple's care for an unspecified role in the Gecenadi Ritual when she ran away. According to Akito, this is the fourth time she's escaped.
d- After some logic from McKay and Sheppard, Akito accepts AG1's promise to help find her in the morning since the night make the task of hunting down a child nigh impossible. They retire to their rooms again.
2. Putting the pieces together.
a- AG1 reunites in their room and relays to each other the two tales.
b- It becomes obvious that whoever this Zephyr girl is, she's in mortal danger and fled because of it.
c- McKay suggests they find her before the Ju'umsun priests can to protect her from the fate. Then they could confront Akito concerning the sacrifical rite.
d- The group agrees and goes to sleep immediantly so they can wake up before sunrise and begin the search.
3. Reason behind the name.
a- The entire team wakes early and splits off as they had been before (since Sheppard is the only person who can handle McKay's additude). Teyla and Ford head to the rocky desert area, Sheppard and McKay to the grassy Oasis lake.
b- Hours tick by with no sign of the missing girl.
c- Near the point of giving up, McKay sees a glimpse of something translucent looking from the corner of his eye. He focuses on the 'empty' spot to finally find a girl sitting there, looking nervous. Once McKay points her out, Sheppard jumps, shocked to have not seen her there. He radios Teyla and Ford to their location before questioning the girl.
d- Surprisingly, the first questioned asked is how she managed to hide in plain sight. Sheedra sheepishly admits it's magic of her family that makes people 'blind' to the user. She apologizes repeatedly for decieving them.
1- The reason Sheedra is called the Zephyr is that her family, all now deceased, was the last of the ancient Yunan Wind Clan. All were taught how to 'blind' people. Since that made them so difficult to find, they were said to be harder to catch than a wind. From that point on, all of the WInd Clan were given nicknames based on winds. (Sheedra's father, Jeequen, was called Tempest; Her mother was Breeze.)
4. Deciding between wind and water.
a- They group returns to the temple with Sheedra. Akito instantly locks the girl in a backroom, much to AG1's protests. The team demand an explanation. Akito tiredly agrees.
b- The Gecanadi Ritual involves what the Yunan's consider unfortunate; someone of little physical beauty. Sheedra was choosen for this because of a cut across her forehead (normally concealed by a cloak she wears) that became infected. Above her left eye is a harsh magenta-blue area from the infection.
c- Ford points out that they could fix the infection with the help of Dr. Beckett. Akito turns down the offer nervously. When they try to convince him, Teyla realizes something.
d- Elder Akito cannot allow Sheedra to be healed because it would weaken his hold over the people because they'd be disbelieving of the effectiveness behind the Gecenadi Ritual. He'd lose power.
e- Outraged, Akito has AG1 escourted out of the temple. He warns them that if they plan to attend to ceremony tomorrow night, they'd do well to behave themselves.
f- The team reports the situation to Weir, asking permission to scrap the diplotmat job to save the innocent girl, effectively making enemies of the Yunan people.
III. "Caution to the Wind"
1. Opposition at Home
a- Weir turns them down without hesistation, claiming they need more allies in the Pegasus Galaxy. Sheppard and Teyla launch into a debate with Weir, trying to convince her to reconsider.
b- When Sheppard lets slip he'll go back and rescue her without permission, Weir orders the group quarantined in the hospital wing for the next 24 hours. Weapons confinscated, AG1 is lead by gunpoint to Beckett's area.
2. A Friend in Need
a- Locked up in the infirmary, the group admits defeat.
b- Except McKay. The usually self-centered astrophysist pleads with his Scottish friend to let them go. Beckett reluctantly says no, not wanting to get in trouble for defying a direct order, whatever the reason.
c- Asking to speak to him in private McKay explains the situation to Beckett, practically begging for his help. Beckett agrees on the condition they find a way to keep him out of trouble. Idea forming, McKay sends Beckett to his research lab to grab the Wraith Stunner he was experimenting on.
d- As he hands over the alien weapon, Beckett realizes what they're gonna do too late. He tries to turn tail and run but Sheppard shoots the medical doctor in the back. The group hauls the unconscience Beckett onto the examination table, McKay breifly apologizes to his friend before they leave for the armory, then the Jumper bay.
3. First Defiance, Then Trickery, Now Thievery?
a- Arriving at the Jumper Bay, fortunately deserted, the crew flies Puddle Jumper 6 to the gateroom, cloaked.
1- They choose JP6 because it's on the second level, therefore anyone briefly looking inside won't notice it gone. b- Ford has second thoughts about defying the order from Weir. Sheppard, having gotten a black mark before, tells him he can leave. McKay and Teyla voice that they're staying to save Sheedra, whatever the consquences. Ford calms down and agrees.
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