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Let's see if I can break it down a bit. No guarantee this would ever make it to a fanfic though. So might be a major teaser. 
Taking longer to explain then I thought. I'm not good at brief synopsis lol
Zelenka gets tricked by Rodney to take his late night shift. It was a yearly analysis of gate addresses that were no longer active, occupied by wraith, etc. Around 5am, an alert pops up and a once dormant gate address is now active. It was at the outer edge of the Pegasus galaxy. Zelenka tells Woolsey and as soon as it was possible they send in a MALP to investigate.
While the MALP moved passed the gate they can see a human figure approach it from a distance. To the left of the gate is a wooded area and a lake beyond that. To the right up high on a hill is a large walled area. The lady finally gets near enough and Woolsey introduces themselves after reassuring her that they were not there to harm them and asks a few questions. She tells him that the town within the tall wooden walls was were they kept the sick people. Most have died already, including her family. Their village was beyond the woods and across the lake and several days journey. Her leader had disabled the gate to keep people from coming in or out because they didn't know where the sickness came from, but now they are in desperate need of supplies and food they can't grow there. Woolsey reassures her again that they will help them. They fetch Doctor Keller and she confirmed that it sounded like the disease Michael created. They tell them they will help and Doctor Beckett is also called in to help with treatments.
John and some other members of Atlantis help what they can with supplies, food, etc. During this time John is befriended by the woman that was talking to Woolsey. She pretty much tends to the villagers needs. She kept to herself after losing her family and many friends, but the leader asked her to her to help Col Sheppard in whatever he asked. While doing various things to help the village she began to ask how they knew how to treat this aliment. John was vague on all the details on Michael, but he gave her enough information to appease her. As she was amazed by their science and technology her shyness start to ease up and she began asking John more question and they started to be friends.
One day, she was sent to off world to go to the markets to get special food and thing for their yearly wine festival. One they hadn't had in ages. Then, she began hearing stories of how the Wraith Michael came to be. Many people were grateful of how Atlantis saved them but also vengeful, for if they hadn't created Michael, they wouldn't have lost their family members. So, some had asked her for her help to kill those involved. Col. Sheppard's name was among those they wanted to kill. She felt conflicted, but mostly hurt because he kept that information from her. A person in the market slipped her a vial. It was venom from an aratus bug that was made into a concentrated form. She was instructed to put in a few drops in each of their cups and by morning they would be dead. No one would know by who or what caused it. A slow death in their sleep.
They day came for the Festival and John, Teyla and Ronon were the high guest of honors. Carson was running late with some lab work and planned on being there as soon as he could. Rodney had to make up his shift to Zelenka, so Jennifer and Woolsey planned on going later in the day.
The woman that befriended John asked to the wine bearer for the guests. Her job was to take each of their cups and fill them from the barrels of fresh wine that were in the tent. She new once they were all dead they'd know it was her, but she finally excepted the job that was asked of her. Teyla and Ronon were not among the listed, so she had to be careful, but they she saw that only John was coming and the rest wouldn't come til later she began to panic. It was no longer a simple job of doing them all at once.
As the feast began the challises were filled by other bearers so they could toast the start of the festival. She was called to the table with the leader noticed John's cup was empty. He complimented the leader on the sweetness of the wine. She nervously smiled at John, he noticed something was off, but didn't get to ask her if she was ok. He ended up pulled into a conversation around the table. She put in a couple drops of the poison, then gave him is cup while he was busy talking. She quietly grabbed his cup again when she noticed he finished his drink. She avoided his looks she felt a mix of guilt and vengeance and was afraid he'd notice. But as she went to put in a couple more drops, she was bumped and accidently spilled half the vial and some got on her hands. She panic and quickly wiped her hand and asked another wine bearer to give it to Col Sheppard since she was beginning to feel ill. She left the tent immediately.
John started to feel odd. His feet were starting to feel numb. He figured he was drinking too hard and should get some air. He politely went to excuse himself saying he had a long day working and just needed to stretch is legs. Teyla and Ronon overheard and knew that was a lie. He was playing golf off the pier more most of the day. As he went to get up he his legs began to buckle. He dismissed it and suggested he drank too much wine, but the leader pointed out that it was the first wine of the season. It had not been fermented yet. This way the children could even share in the festival. John definitely knew something was wrong. He tried to come up with a quip and some lame excuse but as he tried to walk away his legs gave way and he collapsed. He couldn't stand up. Teyla and Ronon rushed to him. Once John explained what he was feeling Ronon looked very concerned. He had heard of something that could do what he's going through, but he heard it took hours if not days to be affective and fatal. There were rumors of the venom of the iratus bug and it's concentrated form, but that it was not something he's had seen himself and the idea of it working so quickly was not good. In the midst of the chaos, no one at the time had a moment to think who could do this to him.
The leader and the villager men, quickly carried John into the puddle jumper. He could feel the paralysis creeping up his leg and up his body. Not a sensation he thought he'd ever have again, but this was far worse. They were too far from the gate to be able to remotely dial the gate to contact them for help. They had to rush to the in the puddle jumper and dial once they got there. Only thing is John was the only one who could drive and they quickness of the spread of the paralysis might mean they wouldn't make in time. They were hours away before they could be in remote range.
John told them to find some tape and tape his hands to the controls. Teyla stayed close in case she had to help him hold on. His other concern was his concentration. He losing that and he could crash the vessel.
As they get closer to the gate John begins to lose the feelings in his fingers. They get close enough to dial the gate to ask Teyla tell them to be ready for them to come in HOT. She begins to explain, but John stops her. "I won't be able to make it in. You have to bring someone across the gate. I'll have to land on the far side of the lake. If I don't we could crash before crossing the lake."
Rodney was at the control tower when the call came in. John struggled with the controls while Teyla and Ronon explained what happened. Woolsey paged both Jennifer and Carson and they rushed to the jumper bay, Rodney rushed up to join them. John was able to land safely and just in time. He couldn't do it any more. Ronon and Teyla took the tape off John's hands and brought him to the back of the jumper to lay him on the bench. Teyla layed him against her to prop him up and as John began to struggle breathing, Ronon walked off the jumper and yelled in rage and sorrow.
There's a lot more, but I don't want to give it all away. lol You know me and my cliffhangers.
Sorry for any bad spelling and grammar.
Taking longer to explain then I thought. I'm not good at brief synopsis lol
Spoiler:
Zelenka gets tricked by Rodney to take his late night shift. It was a yearly analysis of gate addresses that were no longer active, occupied by wraith, etc. Around 5am, an alert pops up and a once dormant gate address is now active. It was at the outer edge of the Pegasus galaxy. Zelenka tells Woolsey and as soon as it was possible they send in a MALP to investigate.
While the MALP moved passed the gate they can see a human figure approach it from a distance. To the left of the gate is a wooded area and a lake beyond that. To the right up high on a hill is a large walled area. The lady finally gets near enough and Woolsey introduces themselves after reassuring her that they were not there to harm them and asks a few questions. She tells him that the town within the tall wooden walls was were they kept the sick people. Most have died already, including her family. Their village was beyond the woods and across the lake and several days journey. Her leader had disabled the gate to keep people from coming in or out because they didn't know where the sickness came from, but now they are in desperate need of supplies and food they can't grow there. Woolsey reassures her again that they will help them. They fetch Doctor Keller and she confirmed that it sounded like the disease Michael created. They tell them they will help and Doctor Beckett is also called in to help with treatments.
John and some other members of Atlantis help what they can with supplies, food, etc. During this time John is befriended by the woman that was talking to Woolsey. She pretty much tends to the villagers needs. She kept to herself after losing her family and many friends, but the leader asked her to her to help Col Sheppard in whatever he asked. While doing various things to help the village she began to ask how they knew how to treat this aliment. John was vague on all the details on Michael, but he gave her enough information to appease her. As she was amazed by their science and technology her shyness start to ease up and she began asking John more question and they started to be friends.
One day, she was sent to off world to go to the markets to get special food and thing for their yearly wine festival. One they hadn't had in ages. Then, she began hearing stories of how the Wraith Michael came to be. Many people were grateful of how Atlantis saved them but also vengeful, for if they hadn't created Michael, they wouldn't have lost their family members. So, some had asked her for her help to kill those involved. Col. Sheppard's name was among those they wanted to kill. She felt conflicted, but mostly hurt because he kept that information from her. A person in the market slipped her a vial. It was venom from an aratus bug that was made into a concentrated form. She was instructed to put in a few drops in each of their cups and by morning they would be dead. No one would know by who or what caused it. A slow death in their sleep.
They day came for the Festival and John, Teyla and Ronon were the high guest of honors. Carson was running late with some lab work and planned on being there as soon as he could. Rodney had to make up his shift to Zelenka, so Jennifer and Woolsey planned on going later in the day.
The woman that befriended John asked to the wine bearer for the guests. Her job was to take each of their cups and fill them from the barrels of fresh wine that were in the tent. She new once they were all dead they'd know it was her, but she finally excepted the job that was asked of her. Teyla and Ronon were not among the listed, so she had to be careful, but they she saw that only John was coming and the rest wouldn't come til later she began to panic. It was no longer a simple job of doing them all at once.
As the feast began the challises were filled by other bearers so they could toast the start of the festival. She was called to the table with the leader noticed John's cup was empty. He complimented the leader on the sweetness of the wine. She nervously smiled at John, he noticed something was off, but didn't get to ask her if she was ok. He ended up pulled into a conversation around the table. She put in a couple drops of the poison, then gave him is cup while he was busy talking. She quietly grabbed his cup again when she noticed he finished his drink. She avoided his looks she felt a mix of guilt and vengeance and was afraid he'd notice. But as she went to put in a couple more drops, she was bumped and accidently spilled half the vial and some got on her hands. She panic and quickly wiped her hand and asked another wine bearer to give it to Col Sheppard since she was beginning to feel ill. She left the tent immediately.
John started to feel odd. His feet were starting to feel numb. He figured he was drinking too hard and should get some air. He politely went to excuse himself saying he had a long day working and just needed to stretch is legs. Teyla and Ronon overheard and knew that was a lie. He was playing golf off the pier more most of the day. As he went to get up he his legs began to buckle. He dismissed it and suggested he drank too much wine, but the leader pointed out that it was the first wine of the season. It had not been fermented yet. This way the children could even share in the festival. John definitely knew something was wrong. He tried to come up with a quip and some lame excuse but as he tried to walk away his legs gave way and he collapsed. He couldn't stand up. Teyla and Ronon rushed to him. Once John explained what he was feeling Ronon looked very concerned. He had heard of something that could do what he's going through, but he heard it took hours if not days to be affective and fatal. There were rumors of the venom of the iratus bug and it's concentrated form, but that it was not something he's had seen himself and the idea of it working so quickly was not good. In the midst of the chaos, no one at the time had a moment to think who could do this to him.
The leader and the villager men, quickly carried John into the puddle jumper. He could feel the paralysis creeping up his leg and up his body. Not a sensation he thought he'd ever have again, but this was far worse. They were too far from the gate to be able to remotely dial the gate to contact them for help. They had to rush to the in the puddle jumper and dial once they got there. Only thing is John was the only one who could drive and they quickness of the spread of the paralysis might mean they wouldn't make in time. They were hours away before they could be in remote range.
John told them to find some tape and tape his hands to the controls. Teyla stayed close in case she had to help him hold on. His other concern was his concentration. He losing that and he could crash the vessel.
As they get closer to the gate John begins to lose the feelings in his fingers. They get close enough to dial the gate to ask Teyla tell them to be ready for them to come in HOT. She begins to explain, but John stops her. "I won't be able to make it in. You have to bring someone across the gate. I'll have to land on the far side of the lake. If I don't we could crash before crossing the lake."
Rodney was at the control tower when the call came in. John struggled with the controls while Teyla and Ronon explained what happened. Woolsey paged both Jennifer and Carson and they rushed to the jumper bay, Rodney rushed up to join them. John was able to land safely and just in time. He couldn't do it any more. Ronon and Teyla took the tape off John's hands and brought him to the back of the jumper to lay him on the bench. Teyla layed him against her to prop him up and as John began to struggle breathing, Ronon walked off the jumper and yelled in rage and sorrow.
There's a lot more, but I don't want to give it all away. lol You know me and my cliffhangers.
Sorry for any bad spelling and grammar.
and 
fan fiction update: I have written a little more in Torren Snatchers and I'm currently writing some more in a A Wish Yet to Come 2: Finding Teyla. I hope everybody enjoys some freshly beat up Sheppard, latter fan fic I mentioned. Don't worry it's only minor whump and he'll get patched up, but that's all I will say.
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