Originally posted by Wormhole
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Here you go folks, the teaser to the story. BIG THANKS to mcat for the beta and suggestions.
Since this was everyone's idea, if you what to add anything now's your chance before I place it on FF. And btw it still needs a title .
Also just to point out I would like to keep this in the T ratings range.
Enjoy.
Since this was everyone's idea, if you what to add anything now's your chance before I place it on FF. And btw it still needs a title .
Also just to point out I would like to keep this in the T ratings range.
Enjoy.
Spoiler:
Chapter One – Here we go again (Working title).
Hiding from view, John and Aiden rushed into the gateroom to rescue Elizabeth and Rodney from Kolya and his henchmen. It didn’t take long to realize something had gone wrong. Carson and Telya hadn’t appeared in the puddle jumper as planned, and now the enemy was getting ready to leave—taking their hostages with them.
John could hear Rodney shouting his head off over the noise of the storm outside, as he and Elizabeth were being dragged down the staircase. “Seriously, this is a bad idea! You saw what happened to my plan last time, you do not want to do this.”
“Change of plan, you get Rodney when you get my signal to fire,” ordered John as he moved away from Aiden to a different location.
John waited for Rodney to come into view and then signalled to Aiden to start shooting at the Genii.
Confusion and panic soon filled the room when shots were fired at the invading party. Rodney was able to duck and run to freedom, but the situation got ugly when Kolya grabbed Elizabeth before she could register what was going on.
With the exception of Ladon, who had escaped through the wormhole, John could see that all of Kolya’s men had been accounted for. So he rolled onto the deck and aimed his gun at Kolya. He looked directly at Elizabeth, who knew exactly what he wanted and stopped struggling so he could get a clear shot.
John could see the panic in Elizabeth’s eyes, having seen how close they were to the active Stargate, and challenged Kolya: “I will shoot you if you don’t let her go.”
John knew he had a clear shot to Kolya’s left shoulder; he was about to fire when the situation suddenly changed. Kolya moved Elizabeth to block his aim. “And risk hurting Dr. Weir?”
It was John’s turn to panic. He couldn’t get the shot in. But if he didn’t act now, it’d be too late. Elizabeth started struggling again to get away from Kolya. John took a chance and fired just as they disappeared through the Stargate.
“No!” John got up and ran to the event horizon, only to reach the gate as it shut down.
Now he was torn between rescuing Elizabeth and saving the city. Cursing, John ran to the Control Room where Rodney and Aiden were waiting for him. He had to take care of this first for everyone else’s sake. Elizabeth would never forgive him if he let the city fall.
When he arrived, Aiden and Rodney were arguing about the city’s shield, and soon after Teyla and Sora turned up dragging a semi-conscious Carson between them.
“McKay, raise the shield!” yelled John as Aiden warned them of the approaching wave.
“Just a second.” Rodney waited for the right moment before hitting the switch. “Now!”
The shield rose over the city just as the wave collided with it.
In all the excitement, Rodney hadn’t noticed Elizabeth was missing until then. “Sheppard. Why is—where’s Elizabeth?”
All eyes turned to John as they waited for an answer.
Hiding from view, John and Aiden rushed into the gateroom to rescue Elizabeth and Rodney from Kolya and his henchmen. It didn’t take long to realize something had gone wrong. Carson and Telya hadn’t appeared in the puddle jumper as planned, and now the enemy was getting ready to leave—taking their hostages with them.
John could hear Rodney shouting his head off over the noise of the storm outside, as he and Elizabeth were being dragged down the staircase. “Seriously, this is a bad idea! You saw what happened to my plan last time, you do not want to do this.”
“Change of plan, you get Rodney when you get my signal to fire,” ordered John as he moved away from Aiden to a different location.
John waited for Rodney to come into view and then signalled to Aiden to start shooting at the Genii.
Confusion and panic soon filled the room when shots were fired at the invading party. Rodney was able to duck and run to freedom, but the situation got ugly when Kolya grabbed Elizabeth before she could register what was going on.
With the exception of Ladon, who had escaped through the wormhole, John could see that all of Kolya’s men had been accounted for. So he rolled onto the deck and aimed his gun at Kolya. He looked directly at Elizabeth, who knew exactly what he wanted and stopped struggling so he could get a clear shot.
John could see the panic in Elizabeth’s eyes, having seen how close they were to the active Stargate, and challenged Kolya: “I will shoot you if you don’t let her go.”
John knew he had a clear shot to Kolya’s left shoulder; he was about to fire when the situation suddenly changed. Kolya moved Elizabeth to block his aim. “And risk hurting Dr. Weir?”
It was John’s turn to panic. He couldn’t get the shot in. But if he didn’t act now, it’d be too late. Elizabeth started struggling again to get away from Kolya. John took a chance and fired just as they disappeared through the Stargate.
“No!” John got up and ran to the event horizon, only to reach the gate as it shut down.
Now he was torn between rescuing Elizabeth and saving the city. Cursing, John ran to the Control Room where Rodney and Aiden were waiting for him. He had to take care of this first for everyone else’s sake. Elizabeth would never forgive him if he let the city fall.
When he arrived, Aiden and Rodney were arguing about the city’s shield, and soon after Teyla and Sora turned up dragging a semi-conscious Carson between them.
“McKay, raise the shield!” yelled John as Aiden warned them of the approaching wave.
“Just a second.” Rodney waited for the right moment before hitting the switch. “Now!”
The shield rose over the city just as the wave collided with it.
In all the excitement, Rodney hadn’t noticed Elizabeth was missing until then. “Sheppard. Why is—where’s Elizabeth?”
All eyes turned to John as they waited for an answer.
As for a title... what about 'an eye for an eye'
Fionnait_ that story was too sweet, I always loved that line
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