Originally posted by Scary Kitty
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(BTW you are right about the IOA, after all they are politicians. )
I was very glad to meet Jinto again, missed him in the series. Sadly he forgot the fact that when they awakened the Wraith they also rescued his father. But people in pain tend to forget such things, so I think you portrayed him and the Athosians very well and their decision regarding Teyla makes sense. Poor Teyla.
Quite nice space battle you have. Although I thought it took the Wraiths a bit too long to launch their darts, but that's probably me and my Wraith defense.
There is one thing I would like to mention and I hope you don't consider that as petty nitpicking. I like the strategy with the warheads but I'm not sure if they would afflict so much damage on the hive ships if you can't beam them inside. Because in THE SIEGE III when the Mark VIII explode near the last hive ship over Atlantis, they don't seem to inflict a lot of damage.
From the transcript:
(The warheads fly toward the hive ship. Darts fire at them and deflect them enough so that they impact fairly harmlessly on the surface of the ship.)
Another thing, why would Atlantis always try to circumvent the jamming program and get excited in ALLIES to get the jam code, if letting the warheads explode just beside the ship would be as effective.
But otherwise the space battle was well written!
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