But I am jazzed about how it's turning out so I will describe dramatic elements without giving any hints about the specific application of those elements.
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Ashley/Druitt B story
A story
A+B=wrap-up
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Ashley/Druitt B story
Spoiler:
It's the B story I'm most proud of. Ashley's character arc goes through such a dramatic sweep, it almost comes full circle, leaving her just a tad darker than where Revelations, Part II left her and with significantly less hope for a quick recovery.
Druitt's arc does a lot to resolve his future role in the show. Let's face it. The need to do something with Druitt to keep him on the show is a problem. If he's accepted by the Sanctuary team, instant transportation is too powerful, like invisibility. Our heroes don't get to be the underdog in a conflict except under such specific circumstances, you'd spend half an episode just setting up the conflict. If he is rejected outright by the Sanctuary team, it would be over something that would close up that angst-ridden series arc where we wonder if Helen will ever take a risk on him again. She won't.
By the end of the episode, Druitt has a secret he must keep from Helen to protect her. The secret gives him a reason to continue wandering the world doing secret things Helen would NOT approve of and only able to drop by the Sanctuary occasionally.
So far, the Act breaks are timing out just right, but, if I need to, I can drag Henry into being privy to part of Druitt's secret. Druitt pleading his case for Henry's silence would help in expositing a plausible case for a morally just motive behind Druitt's morally ambivalent work. If that's fudging the act breaks, it's at least good quality Mackinac Island fudge.
Druitt's arc does a lot to resolve his future role in the show. Let's face it. The need to do something with Druitt to keep him on the show is a problem. If he's accepted by the Sanctuary team, instant transportation is too powerful, like invisibility. Our heroes don't get to be the underdog in a conflict except under such specific circumstances, you'd spend half an episode just setting up the conflict. If he is rejected outright by the Sanctuary team, it would be over something that would close up that angst-ridden series arc where we wonder if Helen will ever take a risk on him again. She won't.
By the end of the episode, Druitt has a secret he must keep from Helen to protect her. The secret gives him a reason to continue wandering the world doing secret things Helen would NOT approve of and only able to drop by the Sanctuary occasionally.
So far, the Act breaks are timing out just right, but, if I need to, I can drag Henry into being privy to part of Druitt's secret. Druitt pleading his case for Henry's silence would help in expositing a plausible case for a morally just motive behind Druitt's morally ambivalent work. If that's fudging the act breaks, it's at least good quality Mackinac Island fudge.
A story
Spoiler:
The A story is heart wrenching. It draws on different elements of mythologies from around the world surrounding the nature of the abnormality. At least one is clearly stated: "The ---'s of X-country were said to be able to ----" and the abnormal is clearly of X origin. At least one is completely hidden within a necessary story beat: an action that is said to ward off a curse related to the abnormality resolves a crisis stemming from the abnormality. Unfortunately or forturnately, the action is so necessary and logical, I can't have the characters question it to point out its relationship to the superstition.
The suspected cause of the abnormality might make a diagnostician grin due to the relationship between diagnostic jargon describing the microscopic morphology associated with the suspected cause and a macroscopic description of the abnormality, but our heroes have to miss out on that joke because discovering it doesn't advance the story (I guess Helen would get it, though.).
There's some extra drama stemming from Helen having her own problem (B story) to attend to, but not being able to turn away from helping once the fall-out becomes more apparent.
The suspected cause of the abnormality might make a diagnostician grin due to the relationship between diagnostic jargon describing the microscopic morphology associated with the suspected cause and a macroscopic description of the abnormality, but our heroes have to miss out on that joke because discovering it doesn't advance the story (I guess Helen would get it, though.).
There's some extra drama stemming from Helen having her own problem (B story) to attend to, but not being able to turn away from helping once the fall-out becomes more apparent.
A+B=wrap-up
Spoiler:
The A story and B story intertwine in the end where a discovery made in the A story is applied to the B story. There is also a parallel between the stories where questions exposed about the A story potentially answer character motive questions in the B story.
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