Stargate: The Legend of Arcturus Maximus Primus

[Burns]

Thanks for the read! Yeah Grammar and spellings isn't the best I have already started to rewrite my story fixing such errors and any inconsistencies.

You still write better then me, keep it up, i really like this crossover, one of the reasons i"m glad i have DVR

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Glad you like it! You have stargate and startrek on your dvr? Nice!

Should of put this at the start of my story:
My story starts out from Stargate: Atlantis Season 3 episode 5: PROGENY

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Ch 11 has been posted!

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

I have updated it up to chapter 14!

Would like reviews of the newest chapters. 13 +14

AOP

[Burns]

I have updated it up to chapter 14!

Would like reviews of the newest chapters. 13 +14

AOP

They were ok, but I was never a fan of the Q, but all around seemed like something they would do so really looking forward to the next chap.

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

The Q thing will probably be done in 2-3 chapters. Which I think the crew of AMP would be relieved.
Thanks for the review!

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

And we have chapter 15 up!

@Burns: I think you will like this one a lot more.

As always please review!

[Burns]

And we have chapter 15 up!

@Burns: I think you will like this one a lot more.

As always please review!

Yes did like this one a bit more thought I wasn't going to cause it seemed like AMP was having a too easy of a time, but the new drone was a great touch. Way to go, looking forward to more

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Yes did like this one a bit more thought I wasn't going to cause it seemed like AMP was having a too easy of a time, but the new drone was a great touch. Way to go, looking forward to more

Thank you very much!!! AMP is a very hard counter to anything pretty much. But the Borg adapt as fast as they can to any threat they encounter. That new drone though was a surprise for me also. I didn't have the drone in the main outline, but when I wrote the chapter it inserted itself. I then decided to roll with it to see what would happen. O_o But I am really happy how it turned out!!!


I am glad you commented on it!!! I need to finish some real life stuff so it may be a week or two before I get the next chapter up. Sometimes I wish I could skip real life to focus on this.

[locutes]

ughm tried reading the story, but after chapter 5 I did not follow the story at all anymore, it was just weird

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

ughm tried reading the story, but after chapter 5 I did not follow the story at all anymore, it was just weird

hmmm if your specifically talking about chapter six then I tried to do a preview of the future with the first part of the chapter. Chapter 15 is before and after what happened in chapter 6. Though I see that I tried to make known that the first part of Ch. 6 was in the future when I did the second part and started it with: "Several days earlier, and a few thousand light years from the Borg station..."

But I should of put that I was shooting forward in time. If that is what you meant by weird then my fault on that. Thanks for being honest! Please reply if this is what you meant by weird or if it isn't could you clarify weird for me?

Thanks!

[locutes]

it was not that, I lost track of the ENTIRE story, it ended up with me asking what the hell am I reading about.

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Ah so it was confusing? Any suggestions for making it better?

I have been working off and on with re-writing the story. Fixing grammar errors, fixing stuff that doesn't make sense, and trying to make the story flow smoother. This is my first fan fiction so I haven't made one before. But I have been improving in the later chapters which is why I want to rewrite the earlier chapters so they are as good as the later better chapters.

So any ideas would help a lot! You only get better if someone critiques your work.

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Chapter 16 is up!
Chapter 17 probably will be up a week from now.

@Burns: You most likely wont like the end of the chapter, but Junior will disappear again next chapter. But I hope to see what you think of the chapter still! And I may change it depending on the reviews of the end of the chapter.

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Chapter 17 has been added to the story, just waiting for Fanfiction.net to finish adding the story!

Also Burns is betaing for Stargate: The Legend of Arcturus Maximus Primus! So expect a lot less grammar errors! The plan is to have Ch 18 up within a week from now. Maybe faster if my writing reaches a hyper point.

[Burns]

Your getting better, keep it up. Can't wait to read the next chapter

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

I am almost 3k words in the next chapter so far. Hope to finish the first draft on friday, and do a revised draft before I send it to you.

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Chapter 18 is up!

Chapter 18 Title: Chapter 18
Words: 6,596
Genre(s): Sci-Fi/General
Rating: Rated: M
Story Summary: Alternate universe of Stargate Atlantis. This is a story about my 3d
ship I made based on the Ancients! Its going to be a cross over and will
eventually get to the Star Wars Universe, where the mod I made takes place.
Hope you enjoy it!

URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5505302/18/


Credit to me and Burns who betas for me!

[Alpha Omega Protocol]

Updated Chapter 1 with a rewrite of chapter one of AMP. It includes more information of the universe, and a better prologue. It also fixes a ton of grammar mistakes. Burns and I are working to rewrite the first chapters, and we are still working on chapter 19. It is supposed to be the chapter that sets up the rest of the story, and the finish of the first arc and start of the second. I want it to be awesome, and sorry it has taken so long! RL has been bad for both Burns and I.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5505302/1/Stargate_The_Legend_of_the_Arcturus_Maximus_Primus

[Aragon101]

Don't spend too much time on the rewrites, it'll eat away at your SOUL!

Just the first few chapters should be fine. after that focus on more story

I'll drop a better comment on the story itself once i'm not dead tired